Laurence Branson

Thanks guys, I have taken on your advice and I have rewritten the story to a great extent. I ended up making it third person so that I could capture ...

hahah that was hilarious.

Note: I wrote this story for my English exam, which is next week. It's based on the theme of "Searching for Identity", so I would appreciate it if reviewers considered ...

From the looks of it, I'm guessing it's probably just a joke.

Wow. It looks pretty ancient to me. Does that banana symbolise the male phallus? Because he might be trying to emphasise your male characteristics. Are you a typical male? Lol. ...

YAAAAAAAAA This is pro. I'm not a professional songwriter - merely a listener. But, parerea mea, my opinions, I think this song has the potential to be really catchy. Despite ...

I'm sorry if you had felt you had wasted your time with the review. My response to the review was not me defending myself. While I may have blamed a ...

I hardly see a review as helpful when it accuses me of not bothering to proof-read. Of course i proof-read the story. I just missed some errors. Are you telling ...

Well, I wrote it on the spot without intending to put it on this website but then decided later, at the advice of my brother who also read it (and ...

Wow. Thank you for that line-by-line analysis, joshuapaul. This story was actually written on the spot, and perhaps that's why the opening line seems a bit funny. I wrote that ...

Hey, Thanks for the comment. The story didn't have any message to it. It was merely something I wrote to pass the time; I didn't intend it to be a ...

Hey. Whilst this is only my second fictional work published online and my first attempt at a epistolary structure of a short story, please be totally honest with your comments. ...

Hey, I like this story quite a lot. It starts of very well because suspense was established. I think the letter was a bit awkward, though. Some of it was ...

Hey... I agree with what many of the others said; the first paragraph is a bit dull, especially because it's a bit of a cliche orientation (beginning with the characters ...

Thanks. Well, it seems I definitely need to work on my ending. I guess I wasn't clear enough as to who the narrator was. Shouldn't be too hard to fix. ...